Writing the Essay

Study Skill 13.3 Writing the Essay

 

Introductory Activity: Essays in Action

To begin our exploration of essays, let's read another set of samples: 

Example Essay 1

Essay 1

     Do you like hamburgers?  I do.  My mom tells me that eating hamburgers every day is not good for me.  Fast food has been around for a long time.  In this essay, I will tell you why eating fast food every day is bad for you.

     80 percent of Americans eat fast food once a month (https://www.smithsonianmag.com/history/crispy-salty-american-history-fast-food-180972459 Links to an external site.) and that is too much because fast food is bad for you even if it has vegetables and protein it can still have chemicals that can cause cancer or hurt you in other ways.  

     The very first McDonalds opened in 1940 and since then they have sold a billions of hamburger.  They also sell french fries and checkin sandwiches and ice cream.  There is a lot of choices to eat at the McDonalds.  This is why you shouldn’t eat at McDonald’s even though they are a famous restaurant.  They just want to make money and don’t care about your healthy.  

     In conclusion, you should not eat fast food because it is bad for you.  Listen to your mom and not your friends.  Peer pressure might make you want to eat fast food but it is not good.  That is why you should not eat fast food.

 

Example Essay 2

Essay 2

     Every day after school my friends and I walk to an area of our town that has shops, restaurants, and a beautiful, three-tiered fountain.  It is a central part of our town and is always bustling with people, especially in the afternoon when everyone is craving something to eat or drink.  It was inevitable that fast-food restaurants would open in this area to compete for business from shoppers, people meeting each other, and school kids like us. In 2000, the first fast-food restaurant, Chicken Fluffy, opened in this area and it was immediately a popular place to gather.  My friends and I would usually go there after school and order their famous chicken wings and milkshakes as we talked about our day and planned for the weekend.  After an hour or so we all would go our separate ways to do homework and have dinner with our families.  I never gave this ritual a second thought other than looking forward to spending time with my friends. The first McDonald’s opened in 1940 (Klein, 2019) and, just like Chicken Fluffy’s in my town, it became very popular,  but there has always been competition in the fast-food industry. Every restaurant wants to be the one known as the fastest and tastiest, but some restaurants have traded fresh ingredients for food that is full of preservatives and chemicals because it is easier to prepare quickly. there is a trade-off for these complements.  In recent years, some fast-food restaurants are trying to have more healthy options and provide a larger variety of fresh ingredients.  For many, the convenience of eating at places like Chicken Fluffy and McDonald’s often wins out over healthier options or eating at home. 

     McDonald’s didn’t start out as a fast-food establishment.  According to an interview with Richard McDonald (qtd. in Klein), he and his brother started out selling slowly roasted barbecue meat and then realized most of their customers bought hamburgers rather than the barbecue.  The restaurant changed its focus to quickly serve a high number of customers and a high volume of food.McDonald brothers discovered this was the method of making the most money in their restaurant business.  They were giving the hungry public what they wanted:  fast service, not a meal they could cook at home themselves. America’s first fast-food chain, White Castle, had figured out this system in 1921 when the owners realized they could incorporate the assembly line technique of a factory into making sandwiches in their restaurants (Diamond).  Although it was not nutritious, the ability to give every customer the same food at every visit was a big plus in the industry at that time.  

     It is common knowledge that eating fast food is not healthy.  It doesn’t matter if you choose tacos, pizza, or burgers, the calories and chemicals consumed are greater than if you made these same foods at home using fresh ingredients.  According to Matthew Thompson, an editor for Eating Well  Magazine, a Big Mac from McDonald’s has 540 calories and 29 mg of saturated fat.  Thompson states that if you made this same burger at home, you would consume 375 calories and 16 mg of saturated fat.  While the homemade burger is still on the unhealthy side, it is significantly fewer calories and fat than the Big Mac made at McDonald’s.  Thompson also looks at the sodium in Big Mac, which is double that of a homemade burger coming in at a whopping 1,010 mg. According to Thompson, another issue contributing to the unhealthiness of the Big Mac is the buns, which are highly processed and contain several different chemicals.  He compares this to a bun you could buy from a local bakery that has just five ingredients.   The problem of making unhealthy choices is compounded when unhealthy foods take the place of healthy foods in our diets. A study has shown that children who attend school near fast-food restaurants eat fewer servings of fruits and vegetables, more sugary drinks and had a higher propensity to be overweight when compared to children who did not attend school near these places of business (Davis and Carpenter 505).   Faced with the growing concern over childhood obesity and the growing concern about unhealthy ingredients, many restaurants are expanding their healthier menu options.  

     There are lots of ways to make healthier choices, even when dining at fast-food establishments.  The Mayo Clinic has made a list of tips that can help you.  These include keeping portion sizes small and choosing grilled rather than deep fried meats.  They also recommend passing up soda because 30 ounces can have more than 300 calories.   McDonald’s now has an Asian Grilled Chicken Salad with only 380 calories and 6 grams of fat (Ali).  If you think salads are the only healthy option take a look at the Steak Fresco Soft Taco at Taco Bell.  It comes in at 150 calories and 4 grams of fat compared to their Fiesta taco salad which has 760 calories and 39 grams of fat (Ali).  In this case, salad is definitely not the healthiest option.  These are just two fast food restaurants but, with a bit of research, you can find healthier options at any place you choose to visit.

While Chicken Fluffy is still tasty and a great place to hang out with friends, it is easy to see that ordering fried wings and milkshakes isn’t the healthiest choice.  As I get older and participate in sports that are more competitive, I realize the value of eating right.  Not only does getting good nutrition help me at sports, but I feel better about myself because of my healthy choices.  This confidence translates to my grades at school and my relationships with classmates and family.  Researching the nutrition of various fast food restaurants has made me more aware of how I can make healthier choices and be a role model to my friends.  We will still meet at Chicken Fluffy after school, but we can eat grilled chicken instead of fried and reserve those calorie-laden milkshakes for special occasions.  

 

Works Cited

Ali, Rasha.  “6 healthy options beyond salad at your favorite fast-food restaurants.”  17 Jan 2019, https://www.usatoday.com/story/life/2019/01/17/healthy-fast-food-mcdonalds-taco-bell-starbucks-chipotle-chickfila-panera/2582149002 Links to an external site.. Accessed 29 Jan 2020.

 

Davis, Brennan, and Christopher Carpenter. “Proximity of fast-food restaurants to schools and adolescent obesity.” American journal of public health vol. 99,3 (2009): 505-10. doi:10.2105/AJPH.2008.137638

 

Diamond, Anna.  “A Crispy, Salty, American History of Fast Food.” Smithsonian Magazine, 24 Jun 2019, https://www.smithsonianmag.com/history/crispy-salty-american-history-fast-food-180972459 Links to an external site..  Accessed 29 Jan 2020.  

 

“Fast food: Tips for choosing healthier options.”  Mayo Clinic, 03 Jul 2019, https://www.mayoclinic.org/healthy-lifestyle/nutrition-and-healthy-eating/in-depth/fast-food/art-20047179 Links to an external site..  Accessed 29 Jan 2020.

 

Klein, Christopher.  “How McDonald's Beat Its Early Competition and Became an Icon of Fast Food.” History Stories, 7 Aug 2019,    https://www.history.com/news/how-mcdonalds-became-fast-food-giant Links to an external site.. Accessed 29 Jan 2020.

 

Thompson, Matthew.  “How does your burger compare to the calories in a McDonald’s Big Mac?”  Eating Well Magazine, 2019, http://www.eatingwell.com/article/17390/how-does-your-burger-compare-to-the-calories-in-a-mcdonalds-big-mac Links to an external site..  Accessed 29 Jan 2020.

Now that you have read these two essays, think about your answers to these questions:

  1. How can Essay Example 1 be revised to best meet the goal of developed paragraphs? 
  2. Look at the conclusion paragraph in  Essay Example 1.  How could it be revised to be stronger and provide closure to the essay?
  3. Where can you find directions and examples for creating an MLA format Works Cited page?
  4. Are all the sources from the Works Cited page cited in the text of Essay Example 2?  How is this important for academic integrity?
  5. What grade would you give Essay Example 1 if you were a writing instructor?  What about Essay Example 2?  How would you justify your grades? 

Introduction to the Concept

Academic integrity is a word you will often hear when writing for any program in the United States.  School children as young as 8 years old are introduced to the concept and the importance of being honest and moral in their academic lives and products.  The most common form of academic integrity is related to citing sources.  This is discussed more in the next part of this tutorial.  

Having academic integrity means you can be trusted to submit only work that is your own, original ideas and, if you used information from other sources to support those ideas, you have cited them correctly.  At the University of Missouri, or MIZZOU, we have an entire office devoted to academic integrity.  (https://oai.missouri.edu/).  The essence of academic integrity is honesty.  You must be honest about what work is your own and what work is that of others.  If you want to use the work or ideas of others to support your opinion, argument, or idea then it is the law that you must cite your sources correctly.  

You heard me.  It is a legal obligation to cite sources correctly.  If sources are not cited correctly and you do not acknowledge the use of sources, you are committing academic dishonesty and the punishments can be severe.  It may even result in a grade of zero on the assignment, an F in the course, or expulsion from the program and school.  We do not want this to happen to you. 

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Special Focus: Other Types of Essays

 

Narrative

Descriptive

Expository

Persuasive

Purpose

Tells a story about a real-life experience

Paints a picture with words, evoke a memory, appeal to the readers emotions

Inform the reader, unbiased, balanced

Convince the reader to accept the writer's point of view or recommendation

Support

Uses vivid details and connects to the reader

Descriptive passages that use details from all five senses to give the reader a sense of being in the same place as the writer

Definitions, facts, examples, and statistics support the thesis

Based on facts, not personal opinion

Written in 3rd person

 

 

Facts and logic, examples, expert opinion, sound reasoning

Structure

Written in 1st person and  ends with a personal statement about a lesson learned

Uses colorful words and sensory details

Compare/contrast

Cause/effect

 Process (how to)

Present all sides of the argument and counter-argument

Link to examples and resources

Purdue - Narrative Essays https://tinyurl.com/yd9xvpo5 Links to an external site. 

Personal Narrative Samples https://tinyurl.com/ydh5ouzz Links to an external site. 

Roanstate - Curse of the Dump 
https://bit.ly/3ecgsYJ Links to an external site. 

Roanstate - Young Lions
https://bit.ly/37CYjB2 Links to an external site. 

Purdue - Descriptive Essays https://tinyurl.com/y58otw7o Links to an external site. 

Butte - Tipsheets https://tinyurl.com/wephp5o Links to an external site. 

Purdue - Expository Essays https://tinyurl.com/ycwuu9ga Links to an external site. 

Roanstate - Types of Papers
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Roanstate - Types of Papers - Contrast/Compare
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Roanstate - Types of Papers - Persuasive/Persuade
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